Read and discuss the revising tips on this page. Then display this paragraph:
I have a parakeet. His name is Captain. He lives in a cage. He eats lots of stuff. I like him. I like birds. Captain is nice.
Then work with your students to revise this writing, using the tips on page 38 as a guide. Make at least these two changes: (1) Cut an unneeded idea. (2) Add new words and/or change some general words.