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Sample Realistic Story

Here is Julia Raleigh’s final draft of “Boating Trip.” Note how she uses action, dialogue, and description to bring her story to life. (See other stories for inspiration.)

Boating Trip

Beginning
The writer sets the scene and introduces characters. One windy fall day, Mom, Mia, Evelyn, and their family dog, Maya, were moving into the lake house that they bought. Mia’s little sister, Evelyn, dropped her bags in the house and ran out on the path leading to the lake.

Middle
Dialogue and action move the story forward. “Mia, can you watch Evelyn until I go down to the lake to join you two?” Mom called out.

Mia huffed. “Do I need to?”