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Revising Personal Narratives

Once you draft your personal narrative, take a break and come back to it to see it freshly. When you revise, you make sure the people, places, and events are clearly described and the writing captures the experience in a vivid way. These activities will help you revise.

Revising to Add Sensory Details

To help your story come alive, you can add details about what you saw, heard, smelled, tasted, and touched. These are called sensory details.

Sensory details help you show readers what is happening, rather than just telling them. You can collect these details in a sensory chart.

See

Hear

Smell

Taste

Touch

bright pink, yellow, and red dresses

sparkly suits

big green chilis in white sauce

beat of guitar and trumpets

laughter and fast conversations

yummy smells coming from the kitchen

soupy and spicy green pepper

delicious tacos

flaky pastries

high fives

Watch the video "Sensory Details."

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See

bright pink, yellow, and red dresses

sparkly suits

big green chilis in white sauce

Hear

beat of guitar and trumpets

laughter and fast conversations

Smell

yummy smells coming from the kitchen

Taste

soupy and spicy green pepper

delicious tacos

Touch

flaky pastries

high fives

Add sensory details.

Read the first draft of your personal narrative. Think of sensory details that you could add to make the writing come alive. Record the details in a sensory chart. Then add them to your personal narrative. Make a copy of this Google doc or download a Word template.

This lesson is a part of the Writing Personal Narratives ES unit.

Click the title to view more information about this unit and a full list of lessons that are included.

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